Task: Part 2 – review (continued)
Sample answer 6
Harry Potter and the Philosopher’s Stone: The Review
Harry Potter is a series of books written by J.K. Rowling, that describes a life of a
young child of the sa the same name. The twist is, that However, Harry Potter is a
wizard and as such by birth and as such, he attends a special wizarding school called
named Hogwarts.
The first book, Harry Potter and the Philosopher’s Stone is an origin story. It begins
by introducing introduces our main hero, an eleven years old boy, and the fact that
he lives with his abusive aunt and uncle, who are muggles – people without the ability
to do magic. During this period, Harry starts to experiences strange occurences, that
are the result of his untapped magical potential. Eventually, Hogwarts’ groundskeeper
named Hagrid delivers a formal school invitation to Harry.
Harry’s first real contact with wizarding worl wo Harry eventually gets to a train
that leads to Hogwarts, where he meets Ron Weasley and Hermione Granger, who
eventually become his best friends.
As the school year progresses in Hogwarts, Harry starts to uncover some information
about his past and the history of the world of magic. He learns, that not so long
ago, wizards were in a terrible sta engaged in a terrible civil war, when dark sorcerer
Voldemort tried to conqer conquer the wizarding world, and enslave the muggle one.
He also learns that Hogwarts contains an artifact, Philosopher’s Stone, which can
grant eternal life, and that Voldemort, who is still alive, is after it. In the finale
showdown, Harry d and his friends defeat Voldemort using their wits, magic and the
power of love and magic.
I’ve read the book when I was eleven years old, which I consider the perfect age to
pick up the Harry Potter series. It is a whimsical urban fatasy w with plotline simple
enough, that the child understands it, but deep enough, so it stays engaged. While there
is a clean definition of who the „bad guys” are, the people occupying Hogwarts are
still fleshed out and nuanced. And, Also, despite it being part one, it gives its readers a
satisfying conclusion to the story ending.
The book is not some revolutionary work of literature, so I believe it’s relevancy will
fade over tiem. It does however, remain a superb book story that is well worth the
read.
Subscale Mark Commentary
Content 4
The content is relevant to the task.
The target reader is on the whole informed. There is information about the
story, and how relevant the book is likely to remain in the future. However, a
description of the impact the book had on the writer when they read it as a
child has been omitted.
Communicative
Achievement
3
The conventions of a review, such as an equal amount of description,
opinion and recommendation, are used with sucient exibility to
communicate complex ideas. The writer’s feelings towards the book are
communicated eectively through careful choice of lexis and the reader’s
attention is held with ease: It is a whimsical urban fatasy; the people
occupying Hogwarts are still eshed out and nuanced.
Organisation 3
The text is a well-organised and coherent whole. Paragraphing is
used eectively to organise the key points in the review and ideas are
connected within and across sentences using a variety of cohesive devices
and organisational patterns, such as referencing pronouns, with some
exibility: a young child of the same name; as such; As the year progresses;
He also learns that … and that … is after it; which I consider the perfect
age; While there is … of who the ‘bad guys’ are, the people occupying
Hogwarts are still; Also, despite it being part one, it gives. Control of
punctuation is variable, and there is some awkwardness of sentence
structure in the penultimate paragraph: with plotline simple enough … so
it stays engaged, but these issues do not impact on the overall ow of the
text.
Language 2
A range of vocabulary, including less common lexis specic to the book
and to book reviews in general, is used eectively and precisely: abusive;
strange occurences; untapped magical potential; uncover information;
conquer; engaged in a civil war; an artifact; grant eternal life; whimsical;
eshed out and nuanced.
A range of grammatical forms is used, generally with control and exibility.
Occasional errors, for example with verb agreement and tense choice, do
not impede communication.
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